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there is a quiet golden
in this evening as it settles
unequaled in its beauty
by even that of precious metals
it embraces vesper’s waning hour
with a subtle gentle heat
lays down upon the eager land
like the roll of amber wheat
it dances in the silken air
strokes your hair aglow in smolders
folds its warmth upon your face
fondles fiery ’round your shoulders
it ignites a special magic
as though dreams are coming true
paints the world in sensual splendor
almost beautiful as you
like a goddess of the sun
in this moment you catch fire
my frail heart a helpless tinder
now sparked by love’s desire
caught by beauty’s reaching flame
I’m filled with passion’s yearning
my captive soul is set ablaze
please don’t leave me burning
before I am but all consumed
quench me with your precious kiss
for if I am to be consumed
I pray it be by bliss
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rob kistner © 2013
(revised 2018)
Consumed by bliss works for me…!
vespers is certainly a golden moment…
Sensual in detail, and the yearning is obvious. Delightful read,
Elizabeth
http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2013/04/05/a-gambol-with-time/
Lovely, Rob. A soft read.
Pamela
A sensuous focus on the body of one loved. Great add to Poets United’s Verse First. Hope you visit all the others and comment on their work as well. The community is a terrific support!
Had me from the first line. You create a beautiful ambience.
This is so laced with desire… like a dream of that kiss.
Glad you like it Bjorn… 🙂
Nice stanza: “like a goddess of the sun
in this moment you catch fire
my frail heart a helpless tinder
now sparked by love’s desire”
Pleased you like it Frank, thank you!
Thank you Frank. I remember feeling like that the first time I saw my wife 31 years ago. Man, do I ever remember!
Sensual, but also very romantic.
That’s how I’m drawn Jane, save those moments when my beast rears its head… then it’s all lust and engulfing…
Wow. This is breathtaking. You took the prompt of desire and made it so much more. There’s such an aching longing throughout your poem, and the romance really sweetens it all the more.
Thank you so much Jade, I am very pleased this resonated for you… 🙂
Oh yes, you have fanned the embers and let words bubble up into sweet romantic images; good on you. You’ve painted a picture of a golden-tressed lover bathed in golden light; I really dug it,
Glad you dug it dude! I love a woman back lit by the sun… 😉
these lines got it for me: “it ignites a special magic
as though dreams are coming true
paints the world in sensual splendor” your poem is very tender but very titillating as well with the images and touches
I’m glad it touched you Jade, thank you for your kind words… 🙂
Such a bliss filled poem to read tonight. I specially like this part:
it ignites a special magic
as though dreams are coming true
paints the world in sensual splendor
almost beautiful as you
So very glad you enjoyed it Grace. Your contribution to the prompt was splendid!
Those last two lines — damn. Nice.
Love this line: “fondles fiery ’round your shoulders”
Glad that resonated with you Rainbow… 🙂
Ah, the waves and ripples of desire and sensual burning in it are so palpable and familiar — the gentle burning, the glow, the smoldering heat, all make for such a romantic experience. And the need and want for that kiss is expressive and evocative. Beautiful! 🙂
I am humbled by your reaction HA, and very greatful for your gracious words. This was inspired by true feelings sparked by my love for my wife…
Sensuous, fiery.
I am pleased this resonated for you VJ, it came from genuine feelings…
this is so romantic and eloquent!
I am pleased you felt that ARW… 🙂
A sensual poem that moves slowly and steadily towards its climax. I love how the ‘quiet golden’ glows through each stanza and especially love the lines:
‘it embraces vesper’s waning hour
with a subtle gentle heat
lays down upon the eager land
like the roll of amber wheat’
and
‘like a goddess of the sun
in this moment you catch fire
my frail heart a helpless tinder
now sparked by love’s desire’.
Kim, these are feelings and moments inspired by my wife…
Love this especially; “it ignites a special magic as though dreams are coming true paints the world in sensual splendor almost beautiful as you.”?? Beautifully done, Rob 🙂
Thank you Sanaa, for your gracious compliment… 🙂
This is oh, so very beautiful and tender!
Thank you Mary,it was a pleasure to write, while envisioning the muse that inspired it… 🙂
so gentle – the metre and rhyme add something of the ingénue
– these lines are very evocative
“lays down upon the eager land
like the roll of amber wheat”
I am glad those lines worked for you Laura, because I wanted to portray a sensuous evening, in a environment, in which was this sensuous woman, all causing me to swoon… the piece was inspired by my wife… 🙂
So well crafted, love the tone of this..almost from another century…Keats, Shelley …well done..JIM
Glad you like it Jim, thank you. Keats, Shelley, wow… I feel my head swell a bit… 🙂 It was inspired by my besutiful wife. I was going for a classic feel to the piece, while keeping it readable to the modern eye. I sm 71 and I have always had an old soul, so maybe I’m channeling a lesser Romantic poet with this one?n 😉
Gorgeous metaphors here, Rob. Stunning poem.
Thank you so much Angela, I appreciate your kindness… 🙂