Flash Dance
Posted by Rob Kistner | Filed under Free Verse, Image, Poetry, homage, humor, joy, photo, rhyme, sensuality, suspense, whimsy, wonder
(version 1)
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of noisy
newborn stars
exploding
with sizzle
and fire
in a plethora
of vivid color
a flash dance
of vibrant sparks
showering our dewy
midnight lawn
this cacophony
of celebration
and pyrotechnical
wonders
passes in
then out of existence
in but a moment
this magical night
•
of noisy
newborn stars
explodes
with sizzle and fire
a spectacle bizarre
a flash dance
of dazzling sparks
shower the heavens
in wondrous light
this cacophony
of celebration
and pyrotechnical
delight
passes in
then out of existence
in but a thrilling moment
this magical night
•
of newborn stars
explodes above us
bold and bright
they swoosh and sizzle
spin and tumble
in mesmerizing
fiery flight
a flash dance
of dazzling sparks
shower the heavens
in wondrous light
this cacophony
of celebration
this pyrotechnical
delight
passes in
then out of existence
in but a moment
this magical night
• • •
rob kistner © 2010
• photo of aerial fireworks by: Astro Spectacular
July 1st, 2010 at 5:09 pm
wonderful. amazing as always. really, really enjoyed. have missed your magpies recently as my computer had been kaput for a month!
BRAVO!
July 1st, 2010 at 5:18 pm
I am going to a 4th of July party pre-fireworks AND I plan on reading your really nice poem … hope that’s OK, I will give you all the credit!
July 1st, 2010 at 7:07 pm
Thank you Lisa…
…rob
July 1st, 2010 at 7:11 pm
Yes Helen, I would be honored by your reading this little piece at your party…
…rob
July 1st, 2010 at 9:40 pm
Hi Rob, I think No2 was better for me, but I really liked the third stanza of 1 because it personalized the poem. Have a great 4th, but as your mother would say, ‘be careful!’
July 2nd, 2010 at 12:05 am
The first stanza really spoke to me, ‘a tiny universe
of noisy
newborn stars.’ brilliant! The imagery is fab. Great magpie!
July 2nd, 2010 at 2:56 am
Thank you Stafford. I always write several initial drafts of a piece, usually deciding on one of the early ones to post - knowing I will edit and rewrite the piece continually into the future. No work is ever finished for me. I opted to post these initial three drafts because I found each variation interesting…
…rob
July 2nd, 2010 at 2:57 am
Thank you Patience, I am pleased you found this initial work engaging…
…rob
July 2nd, 2010 at 3:22 am
I like the way they compare and contrast, just like watching the display.
Happy 4th of July!
July 2nd, 2010 at 3:29 am
Thank you Stan, and a Happy Yankee Uprising Day to you my friend…
July 2nd, 2010 at 7:22 am
Thank you for this celebration of words and images. They sparkle and dance like the fireworks they define. Happy Freedom,
ELizabeth
July 2nd, 2010 at 7:46 am
My pleasure, and happy to you too Elizabeth…
…rob
July 2nd, 2010 at 8:19 am
splendid magpie!
July 2nd, 2010 at 8:54 am
Thank you DS…
…rob
July 2nd, 2010 at 1:38 pm
Lovely, all three!
July 2nd, 2010 at 2:24 pm
Lovely post - Wonderful Title….bkm
July 2nd, 2010 at 6:15 pm
Thank you Willow…
…rob
July 2nd, 2010 at 6:16 pm
Thank you Barbara…
…rob
July 3rd, 2010 at 5:47 am
Happy 4th! Loved all versions!
July 3rd, 2010 at 8:30 am
Wonderful images that certainly do explode on the brainpan as you read. Well played.
July 3rd, 2010 at 9:29 am
Happy back, and thank you Kathe…
…rob
July 3rd, 2010 at 9:31 am
Thank you Thom…
…rob
July 3rd, 2010 at 5:59 pm
I liked version 1 the best. It is personal, marvelling. But I like the image of the public display, too. Wow!
July 4th, 2010 at 9:12 am
Thank you T! As I allow these three pieces to mellow and age, I think I’m being drawn to version 1 as well…
…rob
July 5th, 2010 at 4:54 pm
Somehow the different versions give us an opportunity to re-experience the fireworks’ dazzle and dance! Like re-living a moment! My favourite is the first one - maybe because this is the first experience with the moment! It is fresh and new and exciting! The others are like a taste of that first moment!
July 5th, 2010 at 7:13 pm
I like your perspective here Gemma. As I wrote in a prior comment, I tend to lean to the 1st on, to some degree because I like free verse…
…rob
July 6th, 2010 at 11:24 am
Excellent. I really like the progression through the versions.
July 6th, 2010 at 3:10 pm
Thank you Patti…
…rob
July 7th, 2010 at 11:53 am
Dear Rob: Magnificent poems. My favorite is #3. I love this line;
“of vibrant sparks
showering our dewy
midnight lawn”
Always the sensual element/essence of your poems creates the Art of The Poem making one want to return time and again. There is a wonderful heart-felt Beauty to your poems. The poems are so wonderful when read aloud. Excellence defined in your masterfully creative and most comforting poems.
Thank-you!
July 7th, 2010 at 1:59 pm
Thank you so much Jane, you are most kind…
…rob