and by prompt #134 at One Single Impression.
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memories of you
ripples on a mirrored lake
rise and drift gently
into the golden sunlight
carrying me on their crest
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Joie de Vivre
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clear blue summer sky
deep azure crystalline lake
cool breeze on my face
fresh scent of water lilies
ripples gently lap the boat
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rob kistner © 2010
See what I mean? If I didn’t read every one of the capital and comma-less poems, I’d have missed these gems: your crafty line endings serve for the reader to breathe!
Thank you Viv, it is a matter of form following function — that’s the designer in me…
…rob
Beautiful!
Thank you Deborah
These are lovely, Rob.
I am pleased you find them such Maureen, I was in a serene space…
…rob
Love what you did here. Both poems speak of the serenity you had found in the moment of writing them. I recently did a very similar poem here:
http://claudetteellinger.wordpress.com/2010/09/13/530am/
There is a strikingly similar feeling expressed in both yours and mine. I say that simply to let you know I know of what you speak.
Elizabeth
Thank you ElizaBeth, their creation was most enriching — and I was in a sublime state of mind…
…rob
Both are beautiful and ‘zen’ indeed! I have a feeling of peace as I read them.
I am pleased Mary, thank you for visiting and commenting…
…rob
Beautiful images, beautiful words!
Thank you Diane…
…rob
amazingly beautiful!
Thank you Jingle…
…rob
loved the reflections – a peaceful word-painting
Thank you Ruth…
…rob
Both beautiful!
Kind words Susannah…
…rob
ommmmmmmmmmmmm the ripples of zen contemplation…..nicely done Rob
😉 😉 😉 😉 😉 😉 😉 😉 …ripples of appreciation Wayne…
…rob
It’s simply joie de vivre!
beautiful verses! 🙂
Thank you Amity…
…rob
Both are lovely poems. I especially enjoyed Reflections, the ripples drifting into the golden light are such a beautiful image, though sad.
I appreciate the kind words Aoife/Mari…
…rob
Beautiful and peaceful words inspired by a truly lovely painting!
Glad they all resonated for you Marianne…
…rob
Wonderful imaginary.
Thank you Harshad…
…rob
ripples gently lap the boat … wow for this image 🙂
Glad you liked Nimue…
…rob
These were both so lovely…gorgeous words and depth.
Thank you SITG, appreciate the kind words…
…rob
Great ripples!
As another teacher I relate to this!
about fish, chips, nothing much else
And do get aboard the Poetry Train every Monday mornings and thereafter!
Thank you Gautami, and yes, all aboard the Poetry Train…
…rob
Each line is a visual, sensual feast. Thank you.
You are very gracious Sandy, and most welcome…
…rob
Beautiful..so seren and joyful.. loved the way you have crafted the lines…Rob..
Thank you Ramesh, your words are kind and gracious…
…rob
Glad you dropped in to “Across the Lake, Eerily”, Rob. It lead me to your fine blog and excellent work. Both “Reflections” and “Joie de Vivre” are inspired. I will be listing your (and Kathleen’s) site on the “Honor Roll” over at “ATLE”. Thanks for your comments there.
It was my pleasure to visit Walt, and thank you for your generous comments — honored to be on your honor roll…
…rob
you never disappoint rob 🙂
better clean than careful
You are most gracious Desi, thank you…
…rob
Wonderful writing here Rob. Love and Light, Sender
Thank you Sender…
…rob
there is something wonderful about the being of water and the color of blue… a beautiful portrait of love and serenity… the sky is holding
I am so utterly drawn and mesmerized by water Renee, to me it is magical and incredibly powerful — I am blissfully surrounded here by lakes, streams, rivers, the Columbia Gorge, and the Pacific Ocean… being an Aquarius sign on the cusp of Pisces, water is my element… 😉
…rob
Wonderful Rob. I loved both of your Haiku but maybe the second one a bit more. Lovely.
Melanie
I appreciate your kind words Melanie…
…rob