…this is a love poem, that addresses its sometimes sad impossibility…
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Find you, the elusive,
Elusive, hiding from the light.
I want to see you,
See you, the hidden,
Hidden, cowering out of sight.
I long to know you,
Know you, the evasive,
Evasive, running, ever in flight.
I want to touch you,
Touch you, the distant,
Distant, and as dark as night.
I want to love you,
Love you, the frightened,
Frightened, damaged by your plight.
But I can’t reach you,
Reach you, so broken,
Broken, untrusting, shut down, closed tight.
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rob kistner © 2010
Excellently done – and the repetition works well.
I would love to hear you read this…the scheme you worked out for this works so well. It makes perfect sense in this setting.
Well done….
It’s very musical – I’d love to hear it sung…
The repetitions and rhyme make this sound insistent.
Donna beat me to saying how musical this poem feels. I could easily be made into a song. Nice!
Such a plaintive voice. I felt the sadness in these words….and the beauty. Wonderfully done.
Nice contrast poem to your Naked poem. They actually could work together as part of a series.