Shut Down

Posted by Rob Kistner | Filed under Image, Poetry, art, dark, love, rhyme, tragedy

…this is a love poem, that addresses its sometimes sad impossibility…

 

 

Shut Down

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I hope to find you,
Find you, the elusive,
Elusive, hiding from the light.

I want to see you,
See you, the hidden,
Hidden, cowering out of sight.

I long to know you,
Know you, the evasive,
Evasive, running, ever in flight.

I want to touch you,
Touch you, the distant,
Distant, and as dark as night.

I want to love you,
Love you, the frightened,
Frightened, damaged by your plight.

But I can’t reach you,
Reach you, so broken,
Broken, untrusting, shut down, closed tight.

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rob kistner © 2010

…poem written in response to prompt #113, found at “readwritepoem”

Permalink | Comments (7) | Feb 11, 2010

7 Responses to “Shut Down”

  1. Anthony North Says:
    February 11th, 2010 at 3:17 pm

    Excellently done - and the repetition works well.

  2. mark Says:
    February 11th, 2010 at 3:58 pm

    I would love to hear you read this…the scheme you worked out for this works so well. It makes perfect sense in this setting.

    Well done….

  3. DJ Vorreyer Says:
    February 11th, 2010 at 5:01 pm

    It’s very musical - I’d love to hear it sung…

  4. irene Says:
    February 11th, 2010 at 5:13 pm

    The repetitions and rhyme make this sound insistent.

  5. Paul Oakley Says:
    February 11th, 2010 at 10:38 pm

    Donna beat me to saying how musical this poem feels. I could easily be made into a song. Nice!

  6. Zouxzoux Says:
    February 12th, 2010 at 4:49 pm

    Such a plaintive voice. I felt the sadness in these words….and the beauty. Wonderfully done.

  7. spirtisoflena Says:
    February 13th, 2010 at 9:58 am

    Nice contrast poem to your Naked poem. They actually could work together as part of a series.

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