The Ache

Day 8 “first draft” for NaPoWriMo 2013

The Ache

on love’s regret

there is a brilliant darkness
of the broken soul
from which springs a well
of melancholy
so deep
and bittersweet
as to stir the tongue
of the brooding poet
to loose a torrent
of sorrowed yearning
so rich with longing
that the hearts
of all who read
will ache
with raw desire
for the one true
and burning love
lost to fate
and all of time

• • •

rob kistner © 2013

…inspired by Mag 163
the visual prompt
at Magpie Tales
seen here

“Woman With a Towel”
Degas 1898

also inspired
by image above


my love
you step from your bath
draped softly in towel
gracefully poised
midst the fog of steam

your skin radiant
a’blush from the heat

your auburn hair
fondles damp ’round your shoulders
embraces your lithe neck

a sensuous vision
igniting a spark in my soul
stirring the passion of my heart
setting fire to my imagination

my love
your are venus
a goddess of desire
and my love

I can see your butt

• • •

rob kistner © 2013

*sorry about this cheeky bit 🙂

11 Responses to “The Ache”

  1. Stan Ski Says:

    The one that shouldn’t have got away…!

  2. Kutamun Says:

    Very poignant and beautiful, Rob, cheers

  3. Misky Says:

    Woah. That dug very deep!

  4. Helen Says:

    I agree with Misky … your poem created strong emotions in me …

  5. Karen S. Says:

    Amazing both are, from lovely to even more lovely- but funny too!

  6. Andy Sewina Says:

    Great description, love the last line.

  7. Elizabeth Says:

    Both do the image more than justice, each in its own way. I struggle for one, while you do two, unfair!


  8. Candice Daoud Says:

    Such passion!

  9. Tess Kincaid Says:

    Love them both, Rob…

  10. Sue Anderson Says:

    What a great change-up at the end! =)

  11. Theresa Milstein Says:

    I feel the longing in the first poem. I used the term “yearning” too.

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