Two Poems

Posted by Rob Kistner | Filed under Poetry

A little fun with alliteration and form…

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22 Responses to “Two Poems”

  1. chesca (exskindiver) Says:
    June 13th, 2007 at 9:49 pm

    Hi Rob,
    Image and Verse allowed me to peek into the mind of an artist.
    Thank you for the opportunity to interview you:

    1. You respect but are not quite moved by great masters because only a wholly original experience moves you. Tell us about one such experience.

    2. Please explain “Wise men suffer self.”

    3. If you were to compare yourself to a piece of furniture, what would you be? Describe it.

    4. What steps have you taken towards attaining peace regarding the abandonment you shared in your poem “Sentenced.”

    5. July 3rd is coming up. How were you able to allow your anger to settle? What helped you the most? What did not help?

    Be Well, Rob.
    Thank you for sharing.
    Best,
    Chesca

  2. Rob Kistner Says:
    June 13th, 2007 at 11:56 pm

    Chesca -

    You’re most welcome, it’s my pleasure.

    Excellent questions here. They will make me think, and make me feel — well done.

    My answers will be up on my blog sometime tomorrow.

  3. Paris Parfait Says:
    June 14th, 2007 at 3:02 am

    I like the juxtaposition of life and death here. Each poem is excellent in its own right; the contrast (and the layout) is very clever.

  4. Patti Says:
    June 14th, 2007 at 3:18 am

    I just loved the simplicity of communication. Great stuff!

  5. rel Says:
    June 14th, 2007 at 3:32 am

    Rob,
    Excellant all-round….form and content are well matched.
    rel

  6. Rob Kistner Says:
    June 14th, 2007 at 4:05 am

    Tara -

    Thank you!

    I am very pleased that you liked this little exercise in contrast.
    You picked up on the life and death thing — cool… ;)

  7. Rob Kistner Says:
    June 14th, 2007 at 4:09 am

    Patti -

    I appreciate your kind words!

    This was a wee brainstorm that came over me yesterday. Kinda fun to play with form a bit.

  8. Rob Kistner Says:
    June 14th, 2007 at 4:12 am

    Rel -

    I’m grateful for your compliment!

    Glad this worked for you — a yin yang construct.

  9. Christina Says:
    June 14th, 2007 at 9:14 am

    I enjoyed both and I learn alot from your poetry. Thank you.

  10. sputnik Says:
    June 14th, 2007 at 10:23 am

    Rob, you said on PT that it was “lite fare.” I guess I got something heavier out of “left.” I love the way you juxtaposed two moods, loneliness and triumph, and let alliteration spill out the stories.

  11. Rob Kistner Says:
    June 14th, 2007 at 11:06 am

    Christina -

    I am very glad you enjoyed them!

    It’s wonderful that you are able to take something meaningful from my work. A poet’s always hopeful that what they write has some value.

    Thank you for letting me that, for you, mine does! ;)

  12. gautami Says:
    June 14th, 2007 at 11:11 am

    I like the contrasting images. Both stand on their right. Thanks for this lovely treat!

  13. Rob Kistner Says:
    June 14th, 2007 at 11:19 am

    Dana -

    I guess, with regard to the “Lifeless” part of the piece — it’s a bit more than ‘lite fare’. I was referring more to the fact that I did not draw my inspiration from any particular ‘personal’ moment… so for me it felt lighter than most of my work.

    The piece was also written with as much focus on form as it was on substance — going for the mirror thing of dark/light, good/bad, life/death, sadness/joy, left/right… the yin/yang contrast.

    I am very glad that the work resonated for you — great! ;)

  14. Rob Kistner Says:
    June 14th, 2007 at 11:23 am

    Gautami -

    Wonderful… glad you liked this little exercise!

    They both were intended to stand on their right… or left… ;)

    You are most welcome!

  15. Rethabile Says:
    June 14th, 2007 at 12:54 pm

    Cleverly laid out. But even before the layout and juxtaposition, two good poems.

  16. Robin Says:
    June 14th, 2007 at 2:38 pm

    Two very powerful poems. I found myself trying to synthesize the two into one, but after a few lines it didn’t work. The contrast definitely drew me in, made me think.

  17. Rob Kistner Says:
    June 14th, 2007 at 5:19 pm

    Rethabile -

    Thank you!

    Appreciate your gracious words… ;)

  18. Rob Kistner Says:
    June 14th, 2007 at 5:45 pm

    Robin -

    Thank you sincerely!

    Yeah — I tried to merge the two across the page after I’d placed them. For a brief moment I thought it might go somewhere — but it quickly became way too damned esoteric.

    When it started to make sense, I realized I needed to get away from my computer… ;)

  19. odessa Says:
    June 14th, 2007 at 11:33 pm

    rob,

    i absolutely love the format. and juxtaposing left/right for opening words was brilliant.

    thanks for sharing! and also for your kind comment to my post. :)

  20. Rob Kistner Says:
    June 15th, 2007 at 7:11 am

    Odessa -

    Thank you!

    I am glad you enjoyed… and you are welcome! ;)

  21. chicklegirl Says:
    June 15th, 2007 at 11:27 pm

    I love your alliteration, it’s just so fun to read and let the sounds run together. The first poem made me think of Romeo and Juliet. And I loved the second because I run and do triathlons, and you really captured the thrill and exhiliration of racing there.

  22. Rob Kistner Says:
    June 16th, 2007 at 1:17 am

    CG -

    Thank you, I’m pleased you enjoyed the little dance on the tip of the tongue!

    Romeo and Juliet — what a very perceptive perspective. I now see my piece a little different through your eyes. ;)

    I was a runner many many years ago — when I was an athlete.  Makes my day to know I was able to touch that experience for you.

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