NaPoMo poem #7
This is the seventh of the poems I will be writing each day here in April, in honor of National Poetry Month, as proclaimed by the Academy of American Poets.
• NOTE: these poems will all essentially be early drafts, so edits may occur after their initial posting.
Ziggy
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ivory silk french-cuffed bar-collared shirt
soft as butter sweet as cream dessert
cuff links of diamonds and pure white gold
a heady treasure – bourgeois and bold
pearl-stick-pinned satin tie knotted tight
elegant as paris on a saturday night
desert-tan gabardine three-pleat slacks
euro-cuffed razor-creased sharp as tacks
snakeskin braces buttoned sterling bright
hip and killer as a rattler’s bite
black-patton striders with alligator spats
steppin’ out classy as the coolest cats
fine pinstriped linen coat double-breasted
uptown savvy and velvet vested
full-blocked rolled-brim felt chapeau
in the deepest red of a fine bordeaux
he was crisp and smooth as a dry martini
they all called him ziggy
but his name was bob
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rob kistner © 2009
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• you can find other NaPoMo offerings at read write poem
Wonderful imagery, very nice.
Nice one Rob! we’ve got someone (sort of) named Ziggy in this house too!
(Hey Rob, even with my new reading glasses it’s really difficult to read this feint white print.)
That was really impressive, amazing rhythm and sonorities, and such a cool anti-climax.
I was stunned by all the fashionista linguistics. that sounds like it was an expensive nickname to wear.
nice…ziggy sounds like my uncle
Your Ziggy has managed to oust David Bowie’s Ziggy Stardust as owner of the name. Quite a dresser!
Great sound play!
I enjoyed the images and rhymes in this one. Impressive.
What a great job you did with rhyme, rhythm, and sound here. I was almost snapping my fingers as I read this. Great images, and the “Bob” ending is superb. :0)
That was a real treat. So rich and full-bodied. I really enjoyed it.
Wow! What a neat poem! You dressed that one up nicely.
Thanks for stopping over at my place, too.
What an elegant chap!
How pleasant to read you, dear sir.
Nice rhymes! They’re fresh!
Amazing rhythm! Reads like spoken poetry. I really like the surprise of “Bob”.
wonderful rhythm to this: I can hear his fingers snapping as he walks… 😉
evocative! well done.
Well Done! Enjoyed meeting Ziggy
My goodness. This was a really fun read! Absolutely love the rhythm and the elegant and confident feel of this piece.
Nice one. I could visualise Ziggy, well Bob.
Is that Basin Street Blues or Jazz in the background?
Hi Rob, The font is so much clearer now! Many thanks for adjusting it – I’ll be over to your blog more often now!
Andy Sewina
Well done! I enjoyed reading about Ziggy. I think we have a little bit of something like him buried inside all of us.
Rob,
Thank you sincerely for stopping by my poetry site! 🙂 It’s much appreciated as not very many poets I meet are on Livejournal, so it’s rare that I get any visitors! 🙂 So thank you!
Secondly, this is a very lyrical piece. I love the alliteration and the word choices you’ve used. In fact, you got me so hooked to the beat of it that the last stanza really threw me off and I was laughing because it was so unexpected. What a contrast! Enjoyed reading this! 🙂
Best regards,
A~Lotus