Flash Dance

…response to prompt #21 from Magpie Tales




Flash Dance

(version 1)

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like a tiny universe
of noisy
newborn stars

exploding
with sizzle
and fire
in a plethora
of vivid color

a flash dance
of vibrant sparks
showering our dewy
midnight lawn

this cacophony
of celebration
and pyrotechnical
wonders

passes in
then out of existence
in but a moment
this magical night

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(version 2)

•

a tiny universe
of noisy
newborn stars

explodes
with sizzle and fire
a spectacle bizarre

a flash dance
of dazzling sparks
shower the heavens
in wondrous light

this cacophony
of celebration
and pyrotechnical
delight

passes in
then out of existence
in but a thrilling moment
this magical night

_____________

(version 3)

•

a tiny universe
of newborn stars
explodes above us
bold and bright

they swoosh and sizzle
spin and tumble
in mesmerizing
fiery flight

a flash dance
of dazzling sparks
shower the heavens
in wondrous light

this cacophony
of celebration
this pyrotechnical
delight

passes in
then out of existence
in but a moment
this magical night

• • •

rob kistner © 2010

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• photo of aerial fireworks by: Astro Spectacular

30 thoughts on “Flash Dance”

  1. I am going to a 4th of July party pre-fireworks AND I plan on reading your really nice poem … hope that’s OK, I will give you all the credit!

  2. Hi Rob, I think No2 was better for me, but I really liked the third stanza of 1 because it personalized the poem. Have a great 4th, but as your mother would say, ‘be careful!’

    1. Thank you Stafford. I always write several initial drafts of a piece, usually deciding on one of the early ones to post – knowing I will edit and rewrite the piece continually into the future. No work is ever finished for me. I opted to post these initial three drafts because I found each variation interesting…

      …rob

  3. Somehow the different versions give us an opportunity to re-experience the fireworks’ dazzle and dance! Like re-living a moment! My favourite is the first one – maybe because this is the first experience with the moment! It is fresh and new and exciting! The others are like a taste of that first moment!

    1. I like your perspective here Gemma. As I wrote in a prior comment, I tend to lean to the 1st on, to some degree because I like free verse…

      …rob

  4. Dear Rob: Magnificent poems. My favorite is #3. I love this line;

    “of vibrant sparks
    showering our dewy
    midnight lawn”

    Always the sensual element/essence of your poems creates the Art of The Poem making one want to return time and again. There is a wonderful heart-felt Beauty to your poems. The poems are so wonderful when read aloud. Excellence defined in your masterfully creative and most comforting poems.
    Thank-you!

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