Original DDE™ surrealistic art: “Broken Hope Hotel” by: rob kistner © 2/22/24
S hrouding rains — sanity drains
sorrow celebrates the smothered light
weary winter withers hope’s refrains
no sun to shine, only sour bleak night
greyest grief stirs in the grimacing cold
ghostly mist melts color — this morbid night
on such a night lost souls are sold
broken hearts barren as the blight
Original DDE™ surrealistic art: “Hawk Moon Bog”
by: rob kistner © 2/22/24
hawk moon hovers harsh in a chromium fog
pocking the path from a pitch black sky
foreign and forbidding as a festering bog
this is the dark hour for dreams to die
in this drowning clench of deep despair
horror slithers and dire dejection dwells
horrid misery haunts this harrowing lair
happiness hangs lifeless at broken hope hotel
Original DDE™ surrealistic art: “Lobby of The Lost”
by: rob kistner © 2/22/24
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rob kistner © 2024
Poetry at: dVerse
I love Leonard, have most of his recordings! This piece fits the art and your poetry perfectly. Did you see the full moon last night? It was beautiful here in Bend.
Missed the moon last night, Helen, but I’m sure the full moon over the high desert was just gorgeous. I have seen it before several times in the 25 years I lived in Oregon. Bend is a special place.
Broken Hope Hotel. Phew! That says it all….and these words as well,
“foreign and forbidding as a festering bog
this is the dark hour for dreams to die”
You’ve gone to the dark side, my friend, with this one! Well done.
Thank you Lil… I was channeling my Ed Poe… 😉
A wonderful write, Rob. I enjoyed this line… weary winter withers hope’s refrains. It really does put a damper on things.
Thank you Dwight… 🙂
Read this with Cohen playing in the background and have to say, it got darker! Loved this line especially, “no sun to shine, only sour bleak night” — which to me captured the tenor of such a “dark hour for dreams to die.” Talk about atmospheric — chills at the “broken hope hotel”!
I am pleased it gave you a shiver Dora… 😉
Your poem is alliterative, has a slow, pounding rhythm, and it rhymes! Such darkness, Rob, and a feeling of deep sadness at the broken hope hotel.
It is definite not a pleasant place kim… 🙂
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I think you used this so well and how wonderful to let the alliterative word have onomatpoetic significance… it works so well and portrays the menace of the darkness well.
Thank you Björn. I wandered into this one not sure if I was hitting the mark for the prompt, and no idea where this would go. I am pleased you enjoyed this… 🙂
You darkened the darkness even further, Rob, using the alliteration so well!
Thank you Punam… 🙂