SunsetGunn

NOTE — I borrowed lines and inspiration from my 2011 poem: Skye Fyre
 

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The SunsetGunn is loaded, the controls, in GunnMaster’s grip
calmly concentrating, he scans the horizon with careful eyes
the golden sun having made his journey, is weary from the trip
quicksilver moon will very soon, traverse the starry skies

Gaia rolls on gently, hushed in quiet space
GunnMaster has her skyline, locked squarely in his sight
Gaia pulls a veil of stars, slowly across her face
GunnMaster has a task, he needs complete before its night

he’s to set the sky ablaze, before he falls to sleep
a fiery coral-orange, twilight-blue, and crimson-red
in patterns broad and bold, in colors rich and deep
he carefully aims the SunsetGunn, and blasts it overhead

in a brilliant, blinding flash, he sets the dimming skies a’fire
in vivid hues, and lavish shades — the dusky sky ignites and burns
GunnMaster has succeeded, so for this night, he can retire
the SunriseGunn already loaded, in early morning, he returns

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rob kistner © 2023

Poetry at: dVerse

 



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16 thoughts on “SunsetGunn”

  1. Wonderful writing, Rob! You painted a very vivid scene.
    I love ‘gaia pulls a veil of stars slowly across her face’!

  2. You’re more confident than I am, Rob. I was worried that, if I borrowed lines from one of my own poems, I might just replicate the original poem. Lots of lovely imagery and colour in this one, in particular:
    ‘the great golden sunorb has wearied from its trip
    but quicksilver moon has set upon a hurried course’
    and
    ‘he must set the sky ablaze, before he goes to sleep
    rich fired flames — of coral-orange, and crimson-red
    the pattern needs be broad and bold, color must be deep’.

    1. Thank you Kim… 🙂 I have mined my older work for interesting lines and phrases for years, I simply do my best to let them spark new ideas. I generally then put the mined material aside until later to prevent cross-pollination. In this case, because I completely changed the poem’s form to comply with the prompt, it drove it in a fresh direction by default.

  3. Great personification here, Rob. And I agree with Kim – very brave to take one of your own poems. I have to say, I would struggle to find a rhyming poem of mine to use…

  4. brilliant both literally and how you re-worked your original into this vivid evocation of sunset-gunn
    “the great golden sunorb has wearied from its trip” – most memorable line and one I shall always remember at sunset

  5. This is gorgeous! I especially love; “he’s to set the sky ablaze, before he falls to sleep/a fiery coral-orange, twilight-blue, and crimson-red.” 🙂

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