Original DDE™ surrealistic art: “Box of Love” by: rob kistner © 4/10/24
The bones of my wonder
of my stumbled tumbled dreams
are spilled from my soul box
in which I’ve collected
the scarred and damaged pieces
of my broken hopes
wonders trapped within
a box within more boxes
hope so deeply buried
helplessly interred
but — must not abandon wonder
must not abandon love
love is sealed within
the boxes of my wonder
locked inside my heart
lost in the rubble
of years of broken promise
yet — I will find it again
Original DDE™ surrealistic art: “Emotional Rubble of Lies”
by: rob kistner © 4/10/24
humankind must find love again
to find understanding & peace
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rob kistner © 2024
Poetry at: dVerse
Poetry at: NaPoWriMo 2024 — Day 11
What a poignant soul box, Rob! I love the phrases ‘bones of my wonder of my stumbled tumbled dreams’ – great use of internal rhyme – and
‘the scarred and damaged pieces of my broken hopes’. It’s so important to find that love again.
Thank you Kim, pleased you found this engaging. I was not feeling well when I wrote it, so I will definitely go back to it in the future and do some final edits. I like where it’s heading, but it’s not fully as strong as it like it to be… 🙂
Love the sharpened version
Thank you Björn. I feel less anxiety regarding this posted version of the poem, but I know me, I’ll continue to edit it for a long time — just my way with all my work, never finished… 🙂
Maybe we should share everything we have in our boxes… maybe it will really contribute to change.
Maybe Björn, we just employee everything in our “boxes” in out best effort, to there most effectiveness — then I feel the world would be a much better place my friend… 🙂
That first line itself grabs and holds, Rob, so intensely startling, and you carry that metaphor through with beautiful purpose. Beautifully conceived and wrought, my friend.
Thank you, Dora. I’m glad this resonated for you. As I mentioned to Kim, it’s a very good start on a piece, but I have not been feeling well, so I did not finish it to the strength that would like to. I will go back to it in the future though, and do some final editing. But thank you for your kind words, my friend.
I really like this piece. Kudos.
Thank you Petru, appreciate the kind words… 🙂
Yeah I hear you. I’m on a creative hiatus at the moment, too, so I’m going through my slush pile. Work work work.
Really dug this piece, Bro. Keep going!
Thank you Ron, I appreciate your kind words. I hear ya bro… my overall creative energy had been low. Trying to take a side angle approach to stimulate it by pumping up my activity with my digital art.
Yes yes yes, Rob!
“but — must not abandon wonder
must not abandon love”
Yes, yes yes!
Thank you Lil, I appreciate your enthusiasm. 😉
What a brilliant opening Rob, and a lovely poem that grows from it.
Thank you Kim… 🙂
I liked the ending, changing the cliché of the locked box by burying it under rubble, and sending the speaker into the aftermath to find it.
Thank you, glad you liked the twist Maria…
You have way of drawing the reader in immediately. You had me on the first two lines. Always a pleasure to read your work, Rob.
Thank you True… 🙂
Dreams are what keep the light on.
Sweet dreams to the world — maybe it would help!
This poem draws me right in, Rob. Excellent.
Thank you David… 🙂