The Fool
Posted by Rob Kistner | Filed under Image, Poetry, triolet
“Sad Harlequin” by: Lladró
The Fool
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I will not smile today, you see
my broken heart is hurting. So
tears reside where joy once lived –
I will not smile today. You see,
she loved my wealth, but not so me;
I was a fool, I know.
I will not smile today, you see,
my broken heart is hurting so!
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rob kistner © 2008
May 22nd, 2008 at 7:39 pm
Very melodic - and oh soooooo true of the unsmiling broking heart. Yours is a very art deco blog - quite creative and beautiful . . . I’m off to explore some more of your creativity. I simply love it! I left my other blog (Journal of Reflections) link in this comment; do stop by if you have a chance -
Thank you most kindly for Looking in the Mirror today - and leaving such beautiful reflections of Sunday Mornings. Peace, Light and Love, CordieB.
May 22nd, 2008 at 7:54 pm
oh very nice triolet, Rob, I liked the way the punctuations changed the lines so…good to be reading you again.
May 23rd, 2008 at 1:12 am
The punctuation change is very good. I liked this a lot.
May 23rd, 2008 at 2:08 am
Now that’s a good triolet, I also like the way you’ve changed the punctuation in the repeating lines.
May 23rd, 2008 at 4:26 am
i knew it was a tri’something’.. just couldnt get the right word.. hehe.. love it.
May 23rd, 2008 at 5:16 am
This triolet definitely grabs me, and in part, because of the punctuation marks at just the right places! I can hear you reading it aloud…it’s so clear, and so simple, and still profound in that we all have probably felt this way at some point (tho no one has ever wanted me for my wealth!)
May 23rd, 2008 at 6:47 am
this makes me feel sad
May 23rd, 2008 at 7:09 am
Sad, but cleverly done. I liked that.
May 23rd, 2008 at 8:34 am
Lovely in a very melancholy way.
May 23rd, 2008 at 5:54 pm
Money doesn’t buy love, and it’s not necessarily money, or the lack of it, that brings joy, or sadness.
A lesson for us all.
May 24th, 2008 at 9:17 am
This clever and sophisticated triolet conveys a load of sadness and disillusionment. It also is an original response to the prompt.
You are indeed an accomplished poet to achieve a profound effect with simple words and few!
May 24th, 2008 at 9:55 am
Hey Rob, quite elegant.
Love Lladro - can’t afford it, of course.
May 24th, 2008 at 5:54 pm
Structured poetry or not (I am not a fan of it usually either!), this one sings with feeling!
Beautiful!
Gemma
May 24th, 2008 at 8:39 pm
just lovely!
May 24th, 2008 at 9:18 pm
What a great Lladro image to combine with this sad sad poem!!! And what a frightful person who loved the only the profit and not the means by which the profit came…
May 25th, 2008 at 4:59 am
So simple and yet so full of emotion! Well done!
May 25th, 2008 at 5:04 am
oh this was nicely done… i too am not a fan of form,, but sometimes,, like this,, it really does work to the writers advantage…..
May 25th, 2008 at 7:59 pm
Ah, so sad.
Still, a lovely poem.
Yes there are times to quite smiling.
May 27th, 2008 at 9:17 pm
Great one! I’m still playing with that form myself. It’s addicting…
May 28th, 2008 at 8:45 am
What a beautiful poem. What a BEAUTIFUL poem!!
May 28th, 2008 at 3:06 pm
Great one.. I love the rhythm!!!
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